tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2413615181111769187.post5953728500422633524..comments2013-11-07T07:17:30.339+13:00Comments on Ashleigh : Narrative about Life In Auckland vs SyriaPES Blogs 2013 Adminhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03043164228733682681noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2413615181111769187.post-47379305206662727202013-11-07T07:17:30.339+13:002013-11-07T07:17:30.339+13:00Hey Ashleigh! My name is Kaley. I'm a student ...Hey Ashleigh! My name is Kaley. I'm a student at the University of South Alabama in Mobile, Alabama in the United States of America taking a class titled EDM 310.<br /><br />I’m so sorry you had to experience such terrible living situations in Syria, but I’m so happy that you were able to leave that horrid place to now live where you are most joyful! Even though difficult times are unpleasant they always help us to be much more thankful than we ever could’ve been about the wonderful parts of life. The way you interchanged between the settings of your previous home and your new home with each detail kept your story very well organized! You used several intriguing adjectives to express emphasis of your narrative and it was a highly enjoyable story to read! Great job! Keep up the good work!<br /><br />If you'd like to visit my blog please <a href="http://mcdonaldkaleyedm310.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">click here</a>! <br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2413615181111769187.post-8839281669926621942013-10-23T12:17:23.688+13:002013-10-23T12:17:23.688+13:00Hey Ashleigh,
Auckland really is a peaceful plac...Hey Ashleigh, <br /><br />Auckland really is a peaceful place to live compared to syria isn't it? You've shown that well in your writing :) <br /><br />Watch out for repeating your self, can you find different ways of saying things? Try changing them a noun after you've already told us what 'it' is.<br /><br />Keep writing :) Mr. HutchingsMr. Hutchingsnoreply@blogger.com